Today’s Challenge Results: First Page feedback

Results of our First Page Challenge are in!

Our team of editors randomly selected five of your first pages. Here are their critiques! We enjoyed reading these openings and hope you’ll keep going on your writing journeys.

Thank you for submitting all your fabulous first pages!

On Bended Knee by Lizzie Brooks

Undercover With Her Boss by Tilly Easton

Untitled by Laurie Wood

Untitled by Mary Hansen

Finding Happiness by Trush Gwaltney

And two bonus critiques!

In Love with the Enemy by Camille Bernard

Desire, Baby by Taylor Essem

If you entry wasn’t critiqued here (we are only so many editors), you still have time to enter our other challenges:

Challenge Two: The First Meeting

Show us the first time your romantic leads meet. You can include up to three sentences giving us a quick summary of what’s happened so far, and up two pages from your manuscript showing your first meeting.

Send your first meeting entry in by 10 am EST Wednesday, September 16 and you may be one of 5 entries randomly chosen to receive personalized feedback at 3 pm EST from our editors!

Email: subject line “MEETING Challenge.” Entry can be no more than 2 pages, double-spaced, size 12 font, plus your 1-3 sentence summary giving context for the scene.

Challenge Three: The 100-Word Pitch

Send in a 100-word pitch for your story by 10 am EST Friday, September 18 and you may be one of 5 entries randomly chosen to receive personalized feedback at 2 pm EST from our editors!

Email:, subject line “PITCH Challenge.” Entry can be no more than 100 words. (Your pitch is your story in a nutshell, showing off your romantic leads, plot, and hooks in order to pique the editors’ and voters’ interest!)

Join the conversation on Twitter with the hashtag #SYTYCW15, and follow @HarlequinSYTYCW.

6 replies on “Today’s Challenge Results: First Page feedback”

Thank you so much for your encouraging comments on my critique! I’m very excited to be getting the rest of my story up for this contest, and I am entering it for Carina Press. Have a great day!

Congrats to all the winners of the First-Page Challenge! Great reads and fabulous critiques — a learning experience for all of us! 🙂

Thanks so much for reviewing my first page! It’s nice to hear that I’m on the right track so far, and I really appreciate the advice!

Thank you for the first page critique. It’s not the first time I’ve been accused of being melodramatic! I’m entering for Carina Press, which I understand is open to the oddities…

Thank you so very much for the first page critique! Your feedback is greatly appreciated and it’s so kind of you to take time out of your busy schedules to encourage us!

Thanks for your feedback which is greatly appreciated. Heading off to my SYTYCW entry to make some changes. Thank you again.

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